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Essay Transitions

Wednesday, 21 May 2014



Too often students use the same old transitions over and over again in their essays. Firstly... Secondly... Thirdly... Anyone? 

Good transitions can form strong links between your paragraphs and show readers the relationship and logic in your points.

Try your hand at some of these words and see if it makes a difference in your essay!

Addition

  • furthermore
  • moreover
  • too
  • also
  • in the second place
  • again
  • in addition
  • even more
  • next
  • further
  • last, lastly
  • finally
  • besides
  • and, or, nor
  • first
  • second, secondly, etc.







Exemplification or Illustration

  • to illustrate
  • to demonstrate
  • specifically
  • for instance
  • as an illustration
  • e.g., (for example)
  • for example

Comparison

  • in the same way
  • by the same token
  • similarly
  • in like manner
  • likewise
  • in similar fashion

Contrast

  • yet
  • and yet
  • nevertheless
  • nonetheless
  • after all
  • but
  • however
  • though
  • otherwise
  • on the contrary
  • in contrast
  • notwithstanding
  • on the other hand
  • at the same time






Intensification

  • indeed
  • to repeat
  • by all means
  • of course
  • doubtedly
  • certainly
  • without doubt
  • yes, no
  • undoubtedly
  • in fact
  • surely
  • in fact





Summary

  • to summarize
  • in sum
  • in brief
  • to sum up
  • in short
  • in summary





Credits to https://writing.wisc.edu/Handbook/Transitions.html

O Level & JC GP: Technology and Modern Life Notes

This article is suitable for O Level and A Level learners.



A great article, albeit dated (It was released in 2004). I've highlighted the learning points and key phrases that are easier to understand and suitable for use in your essays. It will be great to use for questions based on Technology and Modern Life. Some examples are:

1. Is technology a boon or a bane for mankind?
2. 'The mobile phone is more a menace than an asset to society.' What are your views?
3. World progress has brought about an increase in the quality of life. Do you agree?
4. People are increasingly self-centered in modern society. Do you agree?
5. In your opinion, what is the most important invention that has changed your life?
6. Technology divides, rather than unite. To what extent do you agree?

Feel free to contribute any similar questions to the list.

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Life Interrupted by Richard Seven, The Seattle Times
Plugged into it all, we're stressed to distraction

DAVID LEVY, A PROFESSOR in the University of Washington's School of Information, believes he may have witnessed the first-ever interruption-by-e-mail. It happened back in the '70s, when he worked at the Xerox Palo Alto Research Center, a think tank at the forefront of today's computing world.

He and about 25 other technologists were watching a visiting scientist demonstrate how to make use of multiple parts of the computer screen. The visitor was typing and talking when a text popped up on one side of the screen. "Oh look," he said, "I've received a message!" He typed a response, sent it into cyberspace and went back to his presentation. But not everyone was impressed — or even pleased. "I remember a visiting senior computer scientist from another country got very angry about it," says Levy. "He said programming requires focus and shouldn't be interrupted. He basically said, 'You call this the future!' "

The future? Well, yes and no. E-mail, as it turns out, was just one drop in a dam-breaking flood of technology that has inundated our lives. Today, the constant pinging of your e-mail can be like
the drip-drip-drip of water torture. We're swimming in doodads and options — text messaging and search engines, Blackberries and blogs, Wi-fi, cell phones that try to do all of the above, and the promise that we haven't seen anything yet.

We're shooting through technological rapids that have opened doors and changed the dynamic of work, how we communicate and live, and sometimes even think. All these tools have made our lives easier in many ways. But they're also stirring deep unease. Some are concerned that the need for speed is shrinking our attention spans, prompting our search for answers to take the mile-wide-but-inch-deep route and settling us into a rhythm of constant interruption in which deadlines are relentless and tasks are never quite finished. Scientists call this phenomenon "cognitive overload," and say it encompasses the modern-day angst of stress, multitasking, distraction
and data flurries.

In fact, multitasking — a computing term that involves doing, or trying to do, more than one thing at once — has cemented itself into our daily lives and is intensely studied. Research has shown it to be consistently counterproductive, often foolish, unhealthy in the long run, and in the case of gabbing on the cell phone while driving, relatively dangerous. Yet it is also expected, encouraged and basically essential. Do you have never-ending deadlines? Job uncertainty? A dual-income
family life with kids? A do-more-with-less workplace? Then you multitask.

Today, we can do more. And do more, faster. And do more, faster, from anywhere, all the time. You can work at home or the coffee shop or even the beach. Is this a good thing? How do we navigate these rapids without eventually drowning? Are we allowing life to be the sum of tasks,
the short term always the priority? Are we so connected that we're actually disconnected? And has anyone had enough time to focus long enough to mull a question that requires a long, complicated answer — if there is one?

Click here to read the rest of the article

Model Essay: Secondary Level #5

Monday, 23 December 2013

Question: "There is no point in preserving the past. We should be looking into the future." What is your opinion? (O Level, 2003)

Introductory Paragraph
As society progresses, there is an increasing number of people who admire and yearn for advanced technology and products. More often than not, this group of people cast the past and traditions at the back of their minds. However, it is my contention that the past should hold equal, if not more importance when compared to the future. The past could be likened to a rich and fertile soil from which the present and the future can plant their roots on. We should definitely preserve the past for it teaches us important lessons, helps us develop a sense of belonging and identity and lastly, has the potential to spark off inspiration.

(Written by An An S., edited by Ms Chua)

An An is the twin sister of Ping Ping, and similarly, has been my student since her Secondary 4 N Level year. She obtained an A2 for her N Levels, and in year 2013, the first in class position for English has alternated between the sisters. She is now awaiting her O Level results.

Ms Chua

*Unless mentioned, all works and words here belong to the author and may not be reproduced online or in print without first obtaining written permission.

Interesting: 10 Words Not Available in English

Sunday, 22 December 2013

Question: "To keep our roots we must be proficient in our mother tongue." Do you agree?

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Adapted from PHD Education Guide for 1128 English O Levels

There are some instances that we simply cannot find a word in English to convey the exact meaning in its original language. More often than not, in the process of translation, some important elements are lost to the new translated language. I've scoured the web and found these interesting examples to share with you, so that you may better understand the paragraph above. If you wish, you can even use 1 of them in your essay!

1. Word: Mamihlapinatapei 
Language: Yagan (indigenous language of Tierra del Fuego)  
Meaning: “The wordless, yet meaningful look shared by two people who both desire to initiate something but are both reluctant to start.” (Altalang.com) 
2. Word: Zhaghzhagh 
Language: Persian 
Meaning: The chattering of teeth from the cold or from rage.

3. Word: Mencolek 
Language: Indonesian 
Meaning: The old trick where you tap someone lightly on the opposite shoulder from behind to fool them.

4. Word: Zeg 
Language: Georgian 
Meaning: The day after tomorrow

5. Word: Koi No Yokan 
Language: Japanese 
Meaning: The sense upon first meeting a person that the two of you are going to fall in love.

6. Word: Greng-jai  
Language: Thai 
Meaning: That feeling you get when you don't want someone to do something for you because it would be a pain for them.

7. Word: Shemomedjamo  
Language: Georgian 
Meaning: You know when you’re really full, but your meal is just so delicious, you can’t stop eating it? This word means, “I accidentally ate the whole thing."

8. Word: Faamiti  
Language: Samoan  
Meaning: To make a squeaking sound by sucking air past the lips in order to gain the attention of a dog or child.

9. Word: Gigil  
Language: Filipino 
Meaning: The urge to pinch or squeeze something that is irresistibly cute.

10. Word: Ya’arburnee  
Language: Arabic 
Meaning: This word is the hopeful declaration that you will die before someone you love deeply, because you cannot stand to live without them. 

If you chance upon other interesting examples of such words, leave a comment! Feel free to share this blog post with your friend.

H/T to here and here.

Model Essay: Secondary Level #4

Question: What are the difficulties working mothers face in today's society?

Introductory Paragraph
In the past, women used to take on more subservient roles in the household. As our society improves and with the rise in feminism lobbying for equality, modern women in most liberal societies have found themselves in a position where they may freely choose if they wish to be home-makers or work. Although women today are likely to able to enjoy the same rights as men, their role as a mother and the society's expectations of them have caused them to face some difficulties in juggling between the two roles. Some of the difficulties they face are in areas like caring for their children, completing house chores and maintaining a healthy relationship with their spouses.

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Concluding Paragraph
In a nutshell, in today's liberal societies, women have the right to work and enjoy many activities as they wish. However, taking care of their children, completing the house chores and maintaining their marriage are still largely seen as 'women's work'. As long as this notion still exists in society, women will have to continue to juggle, and in some cases, struggle, between work and family.

(Written by An An S., edited by Ms Chua)

An An is the twin sister of Ping Ping, and similarly, has been my student since her Secondary 4 N Level year. She obtained an A2 for her N Levels, and in year 2013, the first in class position for English has alternated between the sisters. She is now awaiting her O Level results.

Ms Chua

*Unless mentioned, all works and words here belong to the author and may not be reproduced online or in print without first obtaining written permission.

Model Essay: Secondary Level #3

Question: In the 21st century, how important is it to be able to read, write and speak in English in Singapore?

Introductory Paragraph
Since the government's implementation of the bilingual policy in 1966, it has been made mandatory for students to learn two languages should they choose to study in government schools in Singapore. Over time, Singaporeans have become more accustomed to speaking good,  standard English, with it being established as the lingua franca of the island state. This strategic move has also contributed significantly to the tremendous development in Singapore, and continues to play a crucial role in moulding Singapore's further development. With these benefits, it is obvious to see that it is important for Singaporeans to be literate in English. It allows Singaporeans to remain competent in the workforce, to communicate effectively with people of all cultures, and to keep abreast of the latest developments worldwide easily.

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(Written by An An S., edited by Ms Chua)

An An is the twin sister of Ping Ping, and similarly, has been my student since her Secondary 4 N Level year. She obtained an A2 for her N Levels, and in year 2013, the first in class position for English has alternated between the sisters. She is now awaiting her O Level results.

Ms Chua

*Unless mentioned, all works and words here belong to the author and may not be reproduced online or in print without first obtaining written permission.

Model Essay: Secondary Level #2

Question: Only MNCs and major countries can solve the environmental problems today. Do you agree?

Introductory Paragraph:
According to data from the United States Department of Energy's Carbon Dioxide Information Analysis Centre (CDIAC) for the United Nations in 2008, it has been revealed that China and the United States are responsible for 23.5% and 18.3% of world emissions of carbon dioxide respectively. These staggering figures have incurred the ire of environmentalists and advocates worldwide, spurring them to launch campaigns targeted at large countries and MNCs. These campaigns urge these big players to do their part in conserving the environment by reducing their carbon emission. However, whether they are the only ones who can salvage this crisis is highly debatable. There are two schools of thought when it comes to who has the responsibility and power to solve these problems. I, for one, am with the faction that believes that environmental problems are difficult issues that require a collective effort internationally. In my opinion, individual effort, government support; and regional and international organisations can also play a substantial role in the battle against environmental degradation.

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(Written by Ping Ping S., edited by Ms Chua)

Ping Ping has been taught by me since Sec 4, when she was sitting for her N Levels. Originally from China, she has been studying in a neighbourhood school since she was in Sec 1. Ever since I started teaching her, she has improved by leaps and bounds and managed to obtain an A2 for her N Levels. She has been topping her class in English Language for her Sec 5 year (2013) and is now awaiting her O Level results.

Ms Chua

*Unless mentioned, all works and words here belong to the author and may not be reproduced online or in print without first obtaining written permission.

Model Essay: Secondary Level

Saturday, 21 December 2013

Question: Education is the only way to break out of the poverty cycle. Discuss.


Introductory Paragraph:
Sir Francis Bacon, a renowned philosopher, once said "Knowledge itself is power." This saying has been practised by millions of people around the world since time immemorial. Getting an education and obtaining knowledge are seen as the priorities by many people, regardless of cultures. However, how powerful is knowledge? The behaviour displayed by many Singaporean parents in their children's education offers some tell-tale signs. From the franticness of parents during the Primary 1 registration period to the desperation displayed by parents who live hand-to-mouth, but spend their life savings to provide nothing but the best for their children when it comes to education, suffice it to say that there are certainly believers of the age-old adage. I, for one, also believe that education can change people's future and is the only way to get out of poverty. It is because education opens people to more employment opportunities, helps them think critically, and equips people with skills that ensure sustainable growth.

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(Written by Ping Ping S., edited by Ms Chua)

Ping Ping has been taught by me since Sec 4, when she was sitting for her N Levels. Originally from China, she has been studying in a neighbourhood school since she was in Sec 1. Ever since I started teaching her, she has improved by leaps and bounds and managed to obtain an A2 for her N Levels. She has been topping her class in English Language for her Sec 5 year (2013) and is now awaiting her O Level results.

Ms Chua

*Unless mentioned, all works and words here belong to the author and may not be reproduced online or in print without first obtaining written permission.
 

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